Script feedback

Script Feedback 

After handing in my script, I was given my feedback from Steve Coombes. On the feedback I was told that there was good premise, however the treatment of the story was too static, I had not added in enough twists to the story and the ending lacked significance. The amount of flashbacks that I had added to the story should not have been in there, it would just confuse the audience and reader.

I had also added to much dialogue, a lot of it was repetitive so I need to remove a lot of it as it is not needed, there is a lot of action that happens off screen so I need to change that in my script and change the phone call scenes so that the characters interact on screen so the action is happening on screen. 

I realise now that I need to make all these changes to the script, I will need to add more twists into the script and more drama, I feel myself that it didn't turn out the way that I would have liked.